Elaboration
--------------Adding the details needed to paint a picture for your reader.
Whether you write fiction or nonfiction, details are key.
Refer to the paragraph page for information on writing paragraphs. Elaboration Strategies
Criteria
Description: describes what something looks like or sounds like
The crowd roared as Rex, his head dripping in well-earned sweat, slipped through the opposing team's star and dunked the tie-breaker.
Detail: Adds who, what, when, why, where, how information (specific)
Henry, math in hand, tip-toed into the classroom to turn in the late math that he had redone after his little brother barfed all over it the night before.
Strong Verbs: Action (can it be done?) --- pulls, slips, yells
My labrador, Rampage, pulls the table cloth until the plate slips onto the floor and crashes, spilling the roast beef for her to gobble up.
"Stop!" yells Mom.
Emotions: How were you feeling? How was the character feeling? How do the characters feel about each other?
I could see my mom frowning. She tapped her foot and crossed her arms. I knew I was in trouble.
Thoughts: What are the characters thinking?
I thought, “Where did I put the key?”
Example: -- a comparison -- an anecdote, evidence, for instance, for example
Africa is a sleeping giant; The dog was as big as a polar bear.
Dialogue: include conversations between characters to SHOW what is happening
“Yeah!” I yelled. “We're going to the carnival.”
“Please don't spend all your money on the ring toss again,” pleaded Mom.
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